AI 를 이용한 영어 일기 작성 검토 및 공부 방법 (03/09)

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영어 일기

 

일기 작성

Yesterday was a normal weekend until the accident happened.

I realized that there were a couple of missed calls from my son and wife on my phone.

After I finished my golf practice, I called my wife and knew my son got bicycle accident.

I headed to emergency room at local hospital and met my son who had injury on his face. 

I worried about any damages on his brain because he got big bump on his forehead.

After few minutes later, it was our turn to see a doctor.

He suggested examining my son's head with X-ray & CT.

He got those examination and a few moments later we got to know that he has a fractured bone his nose, but fortunately no damage on his brain.

 

📌 수정된 영어 일기

Yesterday was a normal weekend until an accident happened.
I realized that I had a couple of missed calls from my son and wife on my phone.
After finishing my golf practice, I called my wife and found out that my son had been in a bicycle accident.
I rushed to the emergency room at a local hospital and saw my son, who had an injury on his face.
I was worried about any possible brain damage because he had a large bump on his forehead.
After a few minutes, it was our turn to see the doctor.
He suggested that my son's head be examined with an X-ray and a CT scan.
He underwent the tests, and a few moments later, we found out that he had a fractured bone in his nose, but fortunately, there was no damage to his brain.

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📌 수정 및 설명

1️⃣ "until the accident happened" → "until an accident happened"

• (the accident → an accident): 특정한 사고를 언급하는 것이 아니라, 처음 이야기하는 "어떤 사고"이므로 **"an accident"**이 더 적절해.

2️⃣ "After I finished my golf practice" → "After finishing my golf practice"

• (After I finished → After finishing): 더 자연스럽고 간결한 표현이야.

3️⃣ "I called my wife and knew my son got bicycle accident." → "I called my wife and found out that my son had been in a bicycle accident."

• (knew → found out): 문맥상 "알게 되었다"라는 의미를 강조할 때는 "knew"보다는 **"found out"**이 더 적절해.
• (got bicycle accident → had been in a bicycle accident): "get accident"은 자연스럽지 않음. "be in an accident" 또는 "have an accident"이 올바른 표현이야.

4️⃣ "I headed to emergency room at local hospital" → "I rushed to the emergency room at a local hospital"

• ("headed to" → "rushed to"): 급하게 병원으로 간 느낌을 더 강조하기 위해 "rushed to"가 더 적절해.
• ("at local hospital" → "at a local hospital"): 병원이 처음 언급되었으므로 "a local hospital"로 수정.

5️⃣ "who had injury on his face" → "who had an injury on his face"

• (injury → an injury): 가산명사이므로 **"an injury"**로 수정.

6️⃣ "I worried about any damages on his brain" → "I was worried about any possible brain damage"

• ("I worried" → "I was worried"): 자연스러운 표현은 "I was worried"야.
• ("damages on his brain" → "brain damage"): "damage"는 보통 불가산명사로 쓰이고, "on"보다는 "to"를 사용함.

7️⃣ "After few minutes later" → "After a few minutes"

• ("After few minutes later" → "After a few minutes"): "after"와 "later"를 함께 쓰면 중복이라서 "After a few minutes"가 더 자연스러워.

8️⃣ "He suggested examining my son's head with X-ray & CT." → "He suggested that my son's head be examined with an X-ray and a CT scan."

• ("suggested examining" → "suggested that my son's head be examined"): "suggest"는 "suggest that + 주어 + 동사원형" 구조를 사용해.
• ("X-ray & CT" → "an X-ray and a CT scan"): 일반적으로 "X-ray"는 "an X-ray"로 쓰이고, CT는 "a CT scan"이라고 표현하는 게 더 자연스러움.

9️⃣ "He got those examination" → "He underwent the tests"

• ("He got those examination" → "He underwent the tests"): "examination"은 가산명사이므로 "those examination"이 아니라 "those examinations"라고 해야 하지만, 여기서는 "underwent the tests"가 더 적절한 표현이야.

🔟 "he has a fractured bone his nose" → "he had a fractured bone in his nose"

• ("has" → "had"): 과거의 일이라 "had"가 맞음.
• ("fractured bone his nose" → "fractured bone in his nose"): "in his nose"로 수정해야 자연스러워.

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📌 추가 영어 표현 (병원 관련)

✅ "I think I might have a concussion."
👉 "나 뇌진탕이 있는 것 같아요."

• I hit my head really hard, and now I feel dizzy. I think I might have a concussion.
  (머리를 세게 부딪쳤는데 어지러워요. 뇌진탕이 있는 것 같아요.)

✅ "How long will it take to recover?"
👉 "회복하는 데 얼마나 걸릴까요?"

• How long will it take to recover from a fractured nose?
  (코뼈 골절에서 회복하는 데 얼마나 걸릴까요?)

✅ "Do I need to take any special precautions?"
👉 "특별히 조심해야 할 게 있나요?"

• Do I need to take any special precautions after this treatment?
  (이 치료 후에 특별히 조심해야 할 게 있나요?)